Non-anon, because I'm lazy, there's really no point in my trying to be MYSTERIOUS, and you can take the comments for what they're worth in context.
Re: the narrative issue, this being my huge concern as well, I can definitely say that I've never felt lost as to where your characters are coming from in a thread, and I think any misreading I might do of a ping from time to time is on me for not being attentive.
Re: Tara's voice, I will say that these days she sounds closer to later-seasons Tara than she does to S4 Tara, but in the context of her character development in Fandom it makes sense. (Honestly, I have a really low tolerance for wildly OOC character voices in this fandom, so. Take that for what it's worth.) But beyond that, I think you've got it nailed down as far as her mindset and motivations and reactions to things, which IMO is more important than the exact minutiae of dialogue.
Re: Jack Priest / Juliet Darling / Tara Maclay / Quinn Fabray / Romeo Montague
Re: the narrative issue, this being my huge concern as well, I can definitely say that I've never felt lost as to where your characters are coming from in a thread, and I think any misreading I might do of a ping from time to time is on me for not being attentive.
Re: Tara's voice, I will say that these days she sounds closer to later-seasons Tara than she does to S4 Tara, but in the context of her character development in Fandom it makes sense. (Honestly, I have a really low tolerance for wildly OOC character voices in this fandom, so. Take that for what it's worth.) But beyond that, I think you've got it nailed down as far as her mindset and motivations and reactions to things, which IMO is more important than the exact minutiae of dialogue.